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A driver lost control of his car in Honolulu and killed two cyclists today. Let's look at how the Honolulu Star Advertiser covered this collision.

"a collision involving a vehicle” - you might think the bikes hit the car instead of the other way around.

"The vehicle landed in the path of two bicyclists” - sounds more like it landed on the cyclists, not in their path.

"Police said they were not wearing helmets at the time of the crash.” - normally people in crosswalks are not wearing helmets.

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